E SPENT a lot of time carefully choosing literal translations of the Latin texts for the Edmund Campion Missal & Hymnal. But why did we insist upon literal ones? Why not poetic translations? Well, consider this famous verse by St. Thomas Aquinas:
Tantum ergo Sacraméntum Venerémur cérnui:
Et antíquum documentum Novo cedat rítui;
Præstet fides suppleméntum Sénsuum deféctui.
Look at what they proposed for the 1998 Sacramentary, and hopefully you’ll understand what I’m getting at:
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Speaking of the (rejected) 1998 Sacramentary, here’s a selection from a different Pange Lingua, by Venantius Fortunatus:
Lustrix sex qui jam peráctis, tempus implens córporis,
Se volénte, natus ad hoc, passióni déditus,
Agnus in Crucis levátur immolándus stípite.
… and here’s how they translated it in the 1998 Sacramentary, using colloquial, forced phrases like “only born to be rejected”:
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SADLY, THE 1998 SACRAMENTARY VERSION of the Good Friday Hymn by Fortunatus was adopted for the Third Edition of the Roman Missal (although they did repair some of the worst lines and restored two beautiful verses the 1998 had deleted). Here’s another verse from Fortunatus:
Sola digna tu fuísti ferre saecli prétium,
Atque portum praeparáre nauta mundo náufrago,
Quem sacer cruor perúnxit, fusus Agni córpore.
… and here’s the doggerel poetic translation in the 1998 Sacramentary:
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I never thought I’d say this, but I actually agree with Paul Inwood. Despite his somewhat fanatical attachment to the 1998 Sacramentary (for ideological reasons), Inwood excoriates that translation in this forum entry (“Southern Comfort” is his nom de plume). Inwood is absolutely correct: rather than use “Thee” or “Thine,” they chose a truly absurd version. However, what’s odd to me is that, having condemned all things forced and uninspired, “Southern Comfort” then proceeds to recommend that everyone purchase a certain piece by Paul Inwood, whose music is (in my humble opinion) catchy, but rather predictable — consider, for example, this and this.
ADDENDUM: Paul made a good point in the combox. It might be worth pointing out that (normally) poetic translations are used so they can be sung. For myself, however, I always find such translations forced. I suppose there are exceptions … e.g. some of Dr. Neale’s translations. I cite Fortescue’s opinions on this subject in this essay.
